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The table below gives information about the amount of tax collected (as % of GDP) in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005 Summarise the data and write at least 150 words

The table below gives information about the amount of tax collected (as % of GDP) in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005 Summarise the data and write at least 150 words
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The table illustrates
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amount
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tax
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 to the
gdp
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GDP
 of each country during the 30 years from 1975 to
the
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2005. Overview.
This
 graph illustrates the rise and
falls
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compare
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 to the
amount
 of
tax
 in five countries starting with
USA
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the USA
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, Korea, Japan, Turkey and ending with Sweden. The graph mostly rose
however
 there were some exceptions
for example
 In Turkey which was in 1985. In 1975 in
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tax
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the tax
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 was 46% and after
decade
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 it
growth
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 and had become 47% and in 1995 the indicator of the
tax
 showed 51%
finaly
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finally
 in
the
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2005 the
amount
 of
tax
 consisted
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%. In
USA
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the USA
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tax
 was 25.1% in 1975 after ten years it had increased to the 25.4% in 1975
it
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growth
 to the
level
 of 27.1%
in
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 the end in 2005 it was 27.4%. In Korea
tax
 was
in
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1975 15.1%
however
 in 1985 it
growth
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intensivly
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intensively
 and had become 27% in spite of that in 1995 the
tax
 decreased to the
level
 of 26% in 2005 the
amount
 of
tax
 had become 27.3%. Japan started in 1975 the
tax
 with 15% and
this
 slightly
growth
to
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the
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1985
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increased
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to the
level
 of 16%
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that
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in 1985 the
tax
 increased incredibly to the
level
 of 23% and by the end
in
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 2005 it had
become
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 32.1% In Turkey
tax
 was 16.4% in 1975,
during
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 the next ten years
iun
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in
 1985 it decreased to the
amount
 of 15% despite that in 1995 the
tax
growth
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 to the
level
 of 24%
in
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 the end in 2005 it
ends
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with
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 27.4%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, tax, growth, level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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