The chart shows the percentage of people in one country, by age group, who visited one or more museums in 2006, 2011 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart gives information about the proportion of
population
in one country who different ages of Add an article
the population
people
they going
one or much time to museums Wrong verb form
go
from
one decade.
Change preposition
in
Overall
,the chart illustrated three periods of time there are many people
who Add a missing verb
are interest
interest
Replace the word
interested
to visit
Change preposition
in visiting
museum
Fix the agreement mistake
museums
moreover
the higher
point was in 2016 Correct word choice
highest
while
the lower
number was during in 2011.
Correct word choice
lowest
To begin
with 2006 the figure between age who
citizens under 25 Change the pronoun
whom
to
the Change preposition
apply
people
under 35 there was increased marginal
to reach Change the adjective
marginally
to
over Change preposition
apply
quarter
Correct article usage
a quarter
in addition
the next ages there was
decreased to 20 % from the ages 35 to 54 years after that the number reached Unnecessary verb
apply
to
the highest point in the chart it was 40 Change preposition
apply
pre
cent Correct your spelling
per
then
declined sharply to the end of period
.
Add an article
the period
On the other
hand
the figures Add a comma
hand,
of
2011 Change preposition
for
was
growth dramatically to reaching Change the verb form
were
in
Change preposition
apply
the
higher number between the Correct article usage
a
age
Fix the agreement mistake
ages
34
and 44 after that the figures decreased to the lower point Change preposition
of 34
who
Change preposition
for who
people
was
elderly.Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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