The three pie charts compare the composition of four different meals, namely breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks, in terms of three nutrients, namely sodium, saturated fat and added sugar.

The three pie charts compare the composition of four different meals, namely breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks, in terms of three nutrients, namely sodium, saturated fat and added sugar.
The pie charts
shows
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information about how
camparing
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comparing
the four
type
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types
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of food
that
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namely breakfast, dinner , lunch , and
snacks
in addition
three
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different nutrients that include
sodium
,saturated fat and extra
sugar
.
Overall
,
according to
what is shown the highest
number of
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percentage
was
snacks
while
the lowest number of per cent was breakfast and
snacks
in
sodium
.
Gerenally
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Generally
speaking ,
it is clear that
the amount of breakfast was the same
percentage
exactly in saturated fat and added
sugar
while
the
sodium
was just under 15 % .
On the other
hand
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there is a wide disparity between the
snacks
in three meals
in addition
the highest proportion was in added
sugar
after that the
percentage
decreased around to half in saturated fat
moreover
the
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sodium
has taken the lower
percentage
. The
percentage
of dinner the higher portion was
in
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the
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sodium
it
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was 43%
then
the saturated fat made by under 40 %
in contrast
added
sugar
was the lower
percentage
of dinner it was
accounted
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accounting
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for 23 %.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 65%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words snacks, sodium, sugar, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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