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The pie charts below show energy production in Spain in 2008 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show energy production in Spain in 2008 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart depicts the amount of
energy
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production
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 in Spain between 2008 and 2017. It is clear from the graph that
the
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oil
production
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 covered the largest part of the chart in a specific year
while
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 other sources of
energy
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production
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 had the lowest value compared with other products . To
begain
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oil
production
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 was at 27% in 2008 and decreased to 23% in 2017
wherase
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whereas
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 coal
production
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 had the most significant value which was 28%
then
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declinedto
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declined to
declined
 17% in 2017.
On the other hand
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 . The other sources of
energy
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production
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 almost doubled from 3% to 6% from 2008 to 2017.
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 , there was a little
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of
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 gas
production
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 in both years .
On
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the
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others
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nuclear was at 11% in 2008 and jumped to 17% in 2017. Moving
further
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, the renewable
energy
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 was 9% and increased to 16%.
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