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The pie charts below show energy production in Spain in 2008 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show energy production in Spain in 2008 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart depicts the amount of
energy
production
 in Spain between 2008 and 2017. It is clear from the graph that
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oil
production
 covered the largest part of the chart in a specific year
while
 other sources of
energy
production
 had the lowest value compared with other products . To
begain
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oil
production
 was at 27% in 2008 and decreased to 23% in 2017
wherase
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whereas
where
 coal
production
 had the most significant value which was 28%
then
declinedto
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declined to
declined
 17% in 2017.
On the other hand
 . The other sources of
energy
production
 almost doubled from 3% to 6% from 2008 to 2017.
However
 , there was a little
different
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 gas
production
 in both years .
On
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the
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others
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nuclear was at 11% in 2008 and jumped to 17% in 2017. Moving
further
, the renewable
energy
 was 9% and increased to 16%.
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