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1 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A teacher's ability to relate well with students is more important than the ability to give knowledge.

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The issue of the capability of well-related
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 than the
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capability
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 often debated, with
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varying
 perspectives. In my opinion,
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 firmly agree that a strong relationship between
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 and
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 is the most important, as
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 approach seems more effective to give the learning. One of the primary reasons for my opinion is the
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 will comfortable if they study with their beloved
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humans in general will be happy if they do something with the person they love.
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, our mood is going to increase when we study with
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cozy
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.
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, the research from Mr. Alle shows that the spirit and mood will increase
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% if
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togather
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together
 with her loved individual.
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, the studying process will be
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 when we learn and work with
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 creating a comfortable situation. Another important reason supporting my opinion is the
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 will know much about their
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's
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feelings
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 and
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 if they are close.
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explained
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student's
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feeling
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feelings
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 will make
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 process more fun for them where the
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fulfill
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 by their
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. A clear example of
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 can be seen in the kindergarten children in my regency
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who were
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 very happy and they are appealed to do something they
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wanted
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, knowing the
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 strengthens the argument that the ability to make a tough
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with
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 the
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 is the most necessary. In conclusion,
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 the ability to serve
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good teaching
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is slighly
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slighly
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slightly
 important,
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 strongly believe that the capability to make the
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 feel
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 is the most prominent to
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the
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knowledge.
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, the
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 will enjoy their time
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 they love and
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 their urge.

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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow of your paragraphs. Transition words can help guide the reader through your argument more smoothly.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples or evidence to back your main points. This will make your argument more convincing.
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Pay attention to minor grammatical errors, as they can sometimes affect the clarity of your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction effectively outlines your stance on the topic, setting the stage for your argument.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion succinctly summarizes your main points and reinforces your agreement with the statement.
task achievement
You have effectively identified the significance of a teacher's relationship with students in the learning process.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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