The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. 

Summarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The first line chart gives information about the proportion of
households
that had electrical appliances (washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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, and vacuum
cleaner
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) in their house,
whereas
the second chart illustrates
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how many
hours
those
devices
were used during housework per
week
between 1920
to
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2019.
Overall
, the
number
of electrical appliances owned by
households
in a particular country rose for almost a hundred years.
However
, the increasing
number
of the ownership was not followed by the weekly time spent which fell gradually since 1960. In the beginning, the
households
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ownership of washing
machine
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machines
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and vacuum
cleaner
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had the highest proportion, which stood at 40% and 30%, respectively. The proportion for both
devices
then
grew significantly and reached the same point at 70% in 1960.
While
washing machines owned by
households
continued to rise gradually until 2019 at around 72%, the ownership of vacuum cleaners skyrocketed and reached a peak at 100% in 2000 and remained steady until 2019.
On the other hand
, only a few
households
owned a refrigerator in 1920, standing at below 10%.
However
, the
number
grew significantly
for
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90% in 1960 followed by a moderate increase
at
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100% in 2019.
In contrast
with the possession of electrical
devices
that witnessed
a
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growth, the
number
of
hours
spent
for
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each appliance dropped over decades. In 1920, electrical
devices
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usage per household started at 50
hours
per
week
. The
number
then
experienced a significant fall to 20
hours
per
week
in 1960, before dropping steadily to just above 10
hours
per
week
per household in the final year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words households, hours, devices, week, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.

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