The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. 

Summarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first line chart gives information about the proportion of
households
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that had electrical appliances (washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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, and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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) in their house,
whereas
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the second chart illustrates
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how many
hours
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those
devices
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were used during housework per
week
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between 1920
to
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and
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2019.
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, the
number
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of electrical appliances owned by
households
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in a particular country rose for almost a hundred years.
However
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, the increasing
number
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of the ownership was not followed by the weekly time spent which fell gradually since 1960. In the beginning, the
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households
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household's
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ownership of washing
machine
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machines
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and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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had the highest proportion, which stood at 40% and 30%, respectively. The proportion for both
devices
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then
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grew significantly and reached the same point at 70% in 1960.
While
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washing machines owned by
households
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continued to rise gradually until 2019 at around 72%, the ownership of vacuum cleaners skyrocketed and reached a peak at 100% in 2000 and remained steady until 2019.
On the other hand
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, only a few
households
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owned a refrigerator in 1920, standing at below 10%.
However
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, the
number
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grew significantly
for
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90% in 1960 followed by a moderate increase
at
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100% in 2019.
In contrast
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with the possession of electrical
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that witnessed
a
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growth, the
number
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of
hours
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spent
for
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each appliance dropped over decades. In 1920, electrical
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devices
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usage per household started at 50
hours
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per
week
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. The
number
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then
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experienced a significant fall to 20
hours
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per
week
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in 1960, before dropping steadily to just above 10
hours
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per
week
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per household in the final year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words households, hours, devices, week, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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