The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the
amount
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number
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of people joining various activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia between the year
of
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2000 and 2020.
Overall
,
while
most of the activities maintained an upward trend and
film
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the film
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club led in the trend,
the
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amateur dramatics is the only activity that showed a decline. It is noticed that the number of participants
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takes
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part in the film club activity
maintain
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the highest proportion. 65 people joined it in 2000. Despite the fact that it faced a
slightly
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drop, which remained 60 participants in 2010, it rose to about 66 by 2020 eventually.
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