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The following graphs give information about the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) and employment sectors of adeveloping country. Write a report for a university Lecturer describing the information shown below

The following graphs give information about the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) and employment sectors of adeveloping country. Write a report for a university Lecturer describing the information shown below
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The table depicts the
sector
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-wise distribution of employment and
GDP
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 (Gross Domestic Product) in various
sectors
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 of a developing country in 1992,
whereas
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 the line graph shows the contribution to
GDP
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 from these
sectors
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 from 1986 to 1995.
Overall
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, the natural
resources
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sector
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 generated the highest number of jobs among all
sectors
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 in 1992, but the service
sector
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 contributed the most to
GDP
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 that year. The services
sector
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 continued to be the highest
contributor
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 to
GDP
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 between 1986 and 1995. In 1992, the service
sector
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, consisting of three broad categories, accounted for nearly 60% of the
overall
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GDP
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, making it the highest
contributor
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 despite the transport and communication category generating the least amount of jobs (only 1.6%) among any
sector
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. The next biggest
contributor
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 was the natural
resources
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sector
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, accounting for a fifth of the
overall
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GDP
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while
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 generating almost four-fifths of the jobs. The industry and other
sectors
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 had approximately the same employment figures (3.6% vs. 3.8%);
however
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, the other
sector
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 had no contribution to
GDP
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. From 1986 to 1995, the service
sector
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 experienced a gradual decline in the percentage of
GDP
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, starting at around 65% in 1986 and dropping to nearly half of the total share in 1995, despite being the dominant
contributor
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 among the
sectors
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. Natural
resources
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 followed a similar downward trend, decreasing from just under 30% in 1986 to just over 10% in 1995. The industry
sector
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, despite starting out with the lowest figures of around 10% in 1986, increased steadily over the years, overtaking natural
resources
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 in the '94s and ending the period with just over 20%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words gdp, sectors, resources, sector, contributor with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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