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The maps below show the changes that took place at a science and technology museum between 1996 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the changes that took place at a science and technology museum between 1996 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps compare how the layout of
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 and Technology Museum changed from 1996 to 2016.
Overall
, it can be seen that there were major changes in the types of facilities and displays in the museum.
Additionally
, a slight change was featured in the parking
area
. When we entered the building from a parking
area
, we faced a reception
area
 that was expanded in 2016. There was a cafe next to it which was later transformed into a restaurant. After
through
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these areas, a long print room on the right
side
 in 1996 was replaced by a digital technology room and a small feature for 3D cinema by 2016. A library was relocated adjacent to a computer
area
 where the writing desks
area
 was previously featured.
Additionally
, the building was expanded by adding a small VR room on the right
side
, located next to the library. Looking at the left
side
,
while
 an exhibition for a diesel engine was modified
to
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 an electric car display, a steam engine exhibition remained unchanged. On the other
side
, a big solar wind
area
 had been added after a decade.
Furthermore
, the large car park was modified by adding a small space for bicycles which was directly accessed to the pathway for entering the museum.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "displays" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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