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The picture shows coffee bean production. Write an Essay Describing the picture in 150 words.

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The diagram illustrates the process of
coffee
 production, which consists of growing
coffee
beans
, transporting, and grinding.
To begin
 with, farmers in hot countries,
such
 as Brazil, Kenya, and Colombia will grow
coffee
 on their land.
Next,
they will harvest the
coffee
beans
 when they are ripe. After that, these
beans
 will be sorted out
according to
 their quality. Once sorted, they will be cleaned with a sieve and water. Before the
beans
 are transported to the factory, they must be dried in the sun for four weeks. Later, the dried
beans
 will be transported to the factory through a truck.
Then
, the factory worker will process the
beans
 by grinding them to dust.
Lastly
, these
soffee
Correct your spelling
coffee
 powdered will be packed in sacks. After that, these sacks full of
coffee
 powder will be sent to distributors.
Next,
the
coffee
 powder is transported all over the world. In conclusion, the process of
coffee
 production is a complex one within a long time and has to be processed both capital and labour-intensive.
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typographical
Try to avoid small typographical errors, such as 'soffee powdered' which should be 'coffee powder.'
conclusion
Ensure your conclusion ties back strongly to the main points discussed, providing clarity and a strong finish.
logical structure
The essay provides a clear and logical structure of the coffee production process.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion effectively summarizes the process described.
clear comprehensive ideas
Main stages of the coffee production process are clearly described.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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