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he maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

he maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate the developments which took place in the village of Shakeleford between 1930 and 2010.
Overall
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, a comparison of the two maps reveals a complete transformation from a huge
vical
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vocal
 area to
mainly
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a mainly
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 urban area." In the year 1930, there
were
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was
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 a lot of farmland and shops in the town,
after
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but after
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 80 years the town saw a number of a lot changes. One of the
most
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biggest
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 changes
is they knocked
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 down the farmland from the east of the river stroke to build
I
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apply
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make
away
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way
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 for
residential
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a residential
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 area.
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Moreover
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 a new junction was built by
demolished
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demolishing
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 the shops and during
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 time the post office
still
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is still
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 there in the same place.
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, the primary school in the north,
the
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and the
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 retirement home still remained, but
them
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they
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make
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made
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 it bigger after a few
of
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apply
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houses around it. After the garden they used to the road they make it small and replaced it
by
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with
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 a lot of houses and
make
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made
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 a junction to the retirement home
also
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 they make it bigger than before.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • maps
  • Stokeford
  • 1930
  • 2010
  • main features
  • overview
  • changes
  • similarities
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