The maps below show the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and the plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps
shows
information about how the Change the verb form
show
center
of small towns Change the spelling
centre
lslip
between in the present Correct your spelling
slip
in addition
in the future when the
change the destination of the centre.
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they
Overall
, as
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apply
it is clear that
there is a huge change between lslips
town centre now and planned development Correct your spelling
slips
moreover
the most significant in planned development was added a lot of buildingsAdd the comma(s)
, in contrast,
in contrast
the lslips
town now there was a little Correct your spelling
slips
lips
bulided
.
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bullied
blinded
builder
Gerenally
speaking, the map now there is Correct your spelling
Generally
main
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the main
read
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road
while
when the second plane will removing to making different road.
In the north in the development
area will be four locations Add a comma
development,
that
namely new housing in the northeast and in the opposite bus station Correct pronoun usage
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moreover
in the middle will be shopping
centre Correct article usage
a shopping
it
next to Correct pronoun usage
apply
car
park .
On the other side in the Add an article
the car
south
the housing will be converted to new housing Add a comma
south,
while
the school it was
the same place . Verb problem
is in
Likewise
the shops it
will not Correct pronoun usage
apply
changing
.Change the verb form
change
be changing
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