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In t.heir advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasis that their products are new in some ways. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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In modern times, advertisements of businesses put emphasis on the newness of their products and services. Behind
this
 marketing strategy is the intention to draw more customers to patronize what entrepreneurs are selling. In
this
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 I will
dicuss
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discuss
 why it is a negative development.
Firstly
,
commercials
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 announcements of new or improved
product
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products
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 is purely motivated to increase sales. It is a
falacy
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fallacy
 to think that the improvements of the product
is
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are
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 impactful or designed for buyer's convenience. In fact, it is just purely a marketing strategy
inorder
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in order
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 for the people to buy what they already have.
Secondly
, the tactical move on advertising is to tighten up
competitions
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from
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 the industry.
As a result
 of
this
, consumers may switch choices and try what is new. On
one
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 hand, I think it is a negative development. It creates a culture where
instead
 of honest quality improvement, manufacturers will rely on
advertisments
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advertisements
 and marketing. Both the consumer and business industry will have a toxic cycle. In conclusion, advertisement is a common way of introducing or launching
the
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newness
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new
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of
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apply
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the
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apply
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product, yet it can
develop
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have
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negative
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a negative
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 impact on the business side.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revolutionary
  • cutting-edge
  • innovative
  • groundbreaking
  • state-of-the-art
  • novelty
  • unique selling proposition (USP)
  • evolution
  • market differentiation
  • consumer appeal
  • technological breakthrough
  • brand image
  • consumer perception
  • value proposition
  • market saturation
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