■The chart below give information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. ■Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

■The chart below give information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.

    ■Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The bar chart
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illustrates
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Charity in British people by different
age
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ages
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between 1990 and 2010. As can be seen, In 1990 the average of
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were a higher number in Britain .
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while
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in 2010 the
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percentage
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of Chiarity
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decrease
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.
It is clear that
, In 1990 the
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increase
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an increase
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in Charity average to nearly 43%
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People
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36-50.
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, from 18-25
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there
were slump to 16%. In
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in the Same
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from 26-
35
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fell gradually in ton 3% .
Moreover
from 51-65
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were drop to 35%.
On the other hand
, In 2010
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their
were
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increased gradually.from
age
18 to 25
thir
were fell to 6% .
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, from 51 -
65
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their
were most higher number during
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to under 40%.
Moreover
, from 36 to 50
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thir
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they
were the same personage .
In addition
, In 26-35
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their
were
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to 24 % .
To sum up
, we could say that, In 1990
thir
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there
were
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increase
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an increase
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over the
years
. Will in 2010
thir
were decreased.
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