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■The chart below give information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. ■Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

■The chart below give information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. ■Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart
illustrat
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illustrates
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 data
of
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 Charity in British people by different
age
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ages
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 between 1990 and 2010. As can be seen, In 1990 the average of
Charity
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charities
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 were a higher number in Britain .
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while
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 in 2010 the
percantag
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percentage
percentages
 of Chiarity
were
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decrease
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decreased
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.
It is clear that
, In 1990 the
were
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was
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increase
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an increase
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 in Charity average to nearly 43%
fore
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for
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 People
age
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aged
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 36-50.
whill
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will
, from 18-25
years
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years,
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thire
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there
 were slump to 16%. In
additions
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addition
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 in the Same
years
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year's
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age
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of age
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 from 26-
35
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35,
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they
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 fell gradually in ton 3% .
Moreover
 from 51-65
years
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thir
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their
 were drop to 35%.
On the other hand
, In 2010
thir
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their
were
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was
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 increased gradually.from
age
 18 to 25
thir
 were fell to 6% .
whill
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will
, from 51 -
65
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65,
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thir
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their
 were most higher number during
this
years
 to under 40%.
Moreover
, from 36 to 50
years
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years,
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thir
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they
 were the same personage .
In addition
, In 26-35
years
thir
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their
 were
decrease
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decreased
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 to 24 % .
To sum up
, we could say that, In 1990
thir
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there
were
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was
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increase
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an increase
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 over the
years
 . Will in 2010
thir
 were decreased.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, years, thir with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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