The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who used the Internet everyday from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who used the Internet everyday from 2003-2006.  Summarize the information by selecting 

and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart indicates the
rate
of various
age
ranges of adults who lived in the UK and used the Internet in their day-to-day life from the year of 2003 to 2006.
Overall
, the
rates
were in fluctuating conditions and the percentage was mostly high for young
aged
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users
throughout
all
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the years. The main
users
were basically the younger ones and the least
users
were from
elder
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older
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ones. The
users
of
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aged
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age
of
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16-24 were the highest in 2005 with a
rate
of 100%
whereas
the
rate
was equal with a value of 80% both in the years
of
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2003 and 2004.
In contrast
, there
was
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were
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no
user
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users
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in 2003 from the
age
of 65+ and the percentage
raised up
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rose
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a little bit in 2006. The
rates
of middle-aged persons increased gradually in those four years and the
rate
increased from 60% to 80%. It is seen from the range of 25-44 that the
rates
increased gradually like middle-aged ones and the
rate
went up from 50% to 80%.
On the other hand
, the
rated
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rates
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were fluctuating
for
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the range of 55-64 and the
rate
was the highest in the year
of
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2006 with a value of 50%.
Although
the mostly
users
of
internet
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the internet
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were between 16 and 44
and
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the increment of
rates
was up with time regardless of their
age
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, age, rates, users with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • adults
  • age groups
  • Internet
  • daily users
  • increase
  • significantly
  • highest
  • lowest
  • rise
  • contrast
  • smallest
  • followed closely by
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