An organisation has given an advertisement for part time volunteering job for local children. Write a letter to the administrator of the organisation in your letter introduce yourself Why you think you are suitable for this. Job State when you will be able to join

Dear Anna, I am Kübra,
last
month ı attended
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your city organisation. I am so glad for me because
this
volunteering organisation for
children
and
children
so happy
children
. I am
firstly
attending a volunteer organization. I hope
this
is
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will continue. In my opinion
this
program
available
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for
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me. Maybe your thinking
work
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while
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me because ı want to work
this
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volunteering organization. I want to part-time program because I doctor
in
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Ipswich
hospital
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but ı improve myself
about
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children
volunteering. I think I am available
this
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position and ıf you choose me ı
started
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next
monday
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night shift. If you need
a
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another
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information you can see
cv
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. I will add. Take care. Warm sincerly.
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coherence cohesion
Try to organize your thoughts and ideas more systematically to improve the logical flow of your letter.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single clear idea.
task achievement
Consider refining your language and grammar for a clearer and more polished presentation.
content
Your letter addresses the prompt adequately, touching on all necessary points.
task achievement
The tone of your letter is friendly and appropriate for a volunteer position application.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are well-structured and polite.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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