The graph shows the amount earned by graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree (postgraduate) and those with other qualifications. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph shows the amount earned by graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree (postgraduate) and those with other qualifications. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 

Write at least 150 words.
The graph illustrates the
earnings
obtained by
degree
holders
of three contrasting educational levels in 2002.
Overall
, during 2002, the incomes of those with
first
and other
degrees
decreased with increasing age,
while
higher
degree
incomes were moderately rising. At
ages
from
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21 to 25, those with
first
degrees
had the lowest
earnings
. Those with other types of
degrees
had the greatest gains,
whereas
postgraduate
earnings
were gradually increasing. The
first
major feature is that the
earnings
of
other type
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another type
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of
degree
holders
increased dramatically to about 810 at an average age of 36 to 40, but
then
unexpectedly dropped to about 730 between the
ages
of 46 and 55 as age increased, and
then
gradually decreased to 690 between the
ages
of 56 and 60.
On the other hand
,
holders
of higher
degrees
grew from about 380 to approximately 780 between the
ages
of 55 and 56.
Likewise
, the
holders
of the
first
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degree
earnings
climbed from 350 to 690 and
then
remained stable at
ages
36–41,
then
dropped to around 670, and
then
slowly increased between the
ages
of 46 and 56.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words earnings, degree, holders, first, degrees, ages with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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