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The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied bar chart indicates the
unemployment
 level for
women
 in the various countries of the UK over a year period. A glance a the graph reveals that the highest
unemployment
rate
 for
women
 was in England.
However
, Northern Ireland had the lowest amount of
unemployment
rate
 over the period. In 2013, the female
unemployment
rate
 was 6.8% in England, (which was the highest amount of joblessness for
women
 over the whole year) as opposed to the proportion of female
unemoyment
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unemployment
rate
 which was 6.5 in England in 2014.
Moreover
, the proportion of
unemployment
 level for
women
 in Scotland in 2014 was a bit as much as in 2013 at 6.7% and 6.1%, respectively.
In contrast
, the number of
women
 who could not find a job in Northern Ireland was 5.6% in 2013, just ahead of in 2014
which
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 the
unemployment
rate
 for
women
 was 4.6% in Northern Ireland. (which was the lowest amount of
unemployment
rate
 over the period).
Furthermore
, the percentage of
female
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females
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 who could not work as employees in Wales in 2013 was slightly as many as people in 2014 at 5.4% and 5%, respectively.
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