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Many organization and companies ask their staff to wear a uniform. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? What kind of jobs should have a work uniform?

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Nowadays, many employers ask their workers to wear a uniform and many jobs require it. It may have as many benefits as backwards. In
this
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, about professions that are necessary to wear
a
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special
clothes
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.
On the other hand
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, people who
work
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 in jobs where you should be
differ
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to
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 others especially where you will
work
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 with guests.
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, waiters in
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restaurants and cafes, who need to have special
clothes
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 with themselves. Because many visitors and guests want to find a real waiter and to order something.
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, the employees in the shops or
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 magazines. They have the same situation as waiters. Clients have to recognize you through others.
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, in the world many groups
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hope to show their individualism and their fashion. They can wear what they want and they can differ from others. Meanwhile, we have
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builders or individuals who may
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work
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 in dangerous places. These types of person have a helmet, and if they
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get
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 injury, the headwear or other defence can help them and save their lives. Or the hairdressers who
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 in dirty places. They can cut
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 hair,
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clothes
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 will become more and more dirty. The cookers who cook the meals and
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 with many products,
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 vegetables and fructs. They need to wear special things,
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 as an apron. In conclusion, there are so many people and so many points of view. Someone wants and someone doesn't.
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 in the world so many companies and organizations
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should require their staff a uniform.

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coherence cohesion
You should work on organizing your thoughts more logically, particularly in your body paragraphs. Use clear topic sentences and ensure that each paragraph sticks to a single main idea supported with examples. This will help the reader follow your argument more clearly.
task achievement
Your essay mentions the importance of uniforms in specific professions, which is good. However, try to balance the discussion by equally weighing the advantages and disadvantages of wearing uniforms. Include more specific examples to support each point you make.
coherence cohesion
You have provided a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames your essay well.
task achievement
The essay covers both the advantages and disadvantages of wearing uniforms, directly addressing the prompt.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • equality
  • socio-economic disparities
  • professional image
  • brand recognition
  • restrict individual expression
  • customer-facing industries
  • job satisfaction
  • financial burden
  • creativity
  • self-expression
  • identifiable
  • professional appearance
  • sense of belonging
  • corporate identity
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