You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mainfe atures andmake comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The chart above illustrates the
differant
levels of post-school Correct your spelling
different
qualifications
in australia
in the year 1999 Change the capitalization
Australia
along with
the proportion of males and females who held these qualifications
. Overall
, men
have the most
post-school Correct word choice
more
qualifications
than women
do in the given period exept
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except
women
hold a higher percentage of the
undergraduate Correct article usage
apply
diploma
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diplomas
as well as
the
bachelor's degrees .
There Correct article usage
apply
is
five Change the verb form
are
differant
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different
qualifications
chosen in this
chart between diplomas and degrees and as the chart shows there is a significat differance
between Correct your spelling
significant difference
men
and women
in the skilled vocational diploma with 9 out of every 10 diploma holder
being a man .
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holders
Furthermore
there is
some noticeable Correct subject-verb agreement
are
differances
in Correct your spelling
differences
difference
numbers
of Correct article usage
the numbers
men
and women
in each area exept
for the Correct your spelling
except
bachelors
degree in Change to a genitive case
bachelor's
whitch
the numbers are exceptonally close with 50% being females and 45% being males.
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To conclude
, the data reveals significant gender differences in post-school qualifications
in Australia in 1999. Men
dominated most qualification categories, especially in skilled vocational diplomas, while
women
held higher percentages in undergraduate diplomas and bachelor’s degrees. These variations highlight distinct educational paths taken by men
and women
during this
period.Submitted by omniah15 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words qualifications, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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