You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mainfe atures andmake comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mainfe atures andmake comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The chart above illustrates the
differant
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different
levels of post-school
qualifications
in
australia
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Australia
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in the year 1999
along with
the proportion of males and females who held these
qualifications
.
Overall
,
men
have the
most
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more
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post-school
qualifications
than
women
do in the given period
exept
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except
women
hold a higher percentage of
the
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apply
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undergraduate
diploma
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diplomas
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as well as
the
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bachelor's degrees .  There
is
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five
differant
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different
qualifications
chosen in
this
chart between diplomas and degrees and as the chart shows there is a
significat differance
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significant difference
between
men
and
women
in the skilled vocational diploma with 9 out of every 10 diploma
holder
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holders
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being a man .
Furthermore
there
is
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are
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some noticeable
differances
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differences
difference
in
numbers
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the numbers
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of
men
and
women
in each area
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except
for the
bachelors
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bachelor's
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degree in
whitch
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which
the numbers are exceptonally close with 50% being females and 45% being males.
To conclude
, the data reveals significant gender differences in post-school
qualifications
in Australia in 1999.
Men
dominated most qualification categories, especially in skilled vocational diplomas,
while
women
held higher percentages in undergraduate diplomas and bachelor’s degrees. These variations highlight distinct educational paths taken by
men
and
women
during
this
period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words qualifications, men, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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