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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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These graphs represent different types of monthly expenses made by students in
the
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Great Britain and where their income comes from.
Firtly
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Firstly
, the pie chart is
considerated
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considered
. Young generations spend
the
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most of their money covering rent, with the highest average of £385. It is followed by food, with a solid £124, and
also
 by other ways of using finances that represent £91 per month. The
expenditure
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 for the other categories presented in the image are all similar and they consist
in
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 travel, socialising and bills. Moving on to the bar chart, it can be seen how the most spread source of income is from student loans, which are achieved by
an
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80% of
university's
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the university's
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 attendants.
Furthermore
, savings and bank
overdraft
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represents
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 similar
precentages
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percentages
percentage
 of around 40% of attendees of the survey.
On the other hand
, grants and funding are not very popular, with the lowest participation of less
then
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 40%. In conclusion, both family and part-time
job
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jobs
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 strongly involve
slighty
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slightly
 over
then
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 60% of young adults.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 3 times.
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