The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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the difference
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between
number
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the number
people
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who
borned
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born
on
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in
territory
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the territory
Australia
and outside
of Correct determiner usage
those outside
Australia
. All in all, human beings were appeared in cities
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the dominate
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reason that their bar chart was always Change preposition
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keeping
above 40%.
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born
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apply
as
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such as
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have risen
40
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the borned
borned
population in Correct your spelling
born
Australia
in the same year, was considerably less, in fact
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fact,
cities
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the cities
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grew
approximately
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by approximately
to
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meanwhile
others kept similar at the point of 20-30%. Speaking about 2010 year, Add a comma
meanwhile,
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the situation
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the cointry
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were still Correct your spelling
country
on
the top, but achieving Change preposition
at
percentage
of 80. Marks of towns and Add an article
a percentage
rurals
gradually plunged up to 10-15% in Correct your spelling
rural
the
both parts. It was more likely Remove the article
apply
to
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that
people
were been borned
in Correct your spelling
born
cities
area of Australia
and out of it.Submitted by acaitaz on
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