The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph presents
difference
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the difference
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betweent
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between
number
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the number
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of
people
which
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who
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were
borned
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born
on
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in
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territory
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the territory
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of
Australia
and
outside
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those outside
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of
Australia
. All in all, human beings were appeared in
cities
are
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the dominate
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dominate
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dominant
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in
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apply
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reason that their bar chart was always
keeping
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above 40%. The main feature I can emphasize is
people
were
borned
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born
in 1995 outside of the country, in case
that
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apply
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indicators
as
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such as
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cities
and rural areas
were risen
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rose
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upward
40
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of 40
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%. In comparison with
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the borned
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borned
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born
population in
Australia
in the same year, was considerably less, in
fact
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fact,
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that just
cities
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the cities
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index was
slight
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slightly
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grow
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grew
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approximately
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by approximately
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to
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apply
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50%,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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others kept similar at the point of 20-30%. Speaking about 2010 year,
situation
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the situation
a situation
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of the
cities
remained constant as
people
borned
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born
outside
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the cointry
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cointry
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country
were still
on
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at
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the top, but achieving
percentage
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a percentage
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of 80. Marks of towns and
rurals
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rural
gradually plunged up to 10-15% in
the
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apply
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both parts. It was more likely
to
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that
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people
were been
borned
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born
in
cities
area of
Australia
and out of it.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, australia, cities with synonyms.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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