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The line graph below shows the consumption of 3 different types of fast food in Britain from 1970 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the consumption of 3 different types of fast food in Britain from 1970 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart presents 3 types of fast food
consumption
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 in Britain between 1970 and 1990.
Overall
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, the trend of having
hamburgers
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as well as
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fish
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 and
chips
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 is rising,
while
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it is clear that
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 the popularity of
pizza
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 is going down and seems to remain stable. From 1970 to 1985, the
amount
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 of
fish
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 and
chips
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consumption
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 increased continuously from around 100 to 300
grams
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.
In addition
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, it rose to its peak in 1990 at 500
grams
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; it is the highest
amount
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 of fast food in the chart during the survey period.
Similarly
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, the trend of consuming
hamburgers
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 increased
although
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 lower than that of
fish
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 and
chips
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, accounting for
lower
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less
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 than 100
grams
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 in 1970 but rising to a little over 100
grams
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 in 1985. The
consumption
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amount
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 went up to the peak of 300
grams
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 in 1990. Unlike
fish
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 and
chips
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 or
hamburgers
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,
pizza
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consumption
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amount
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 dropped continuously from 300
grams
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 in 1970 to 200
grams
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 in 1985 and remained stable until 1990. In conclusion, despite the fact that
fish
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 and
chips
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,
hamburgers
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, and
pizza
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 are the most popular fast food. The trend of having
pizza
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 decreases,
while
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 that of
fish
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 and
chips
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along with
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hamburgers
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 goes up higher.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, hamburgers, fish, chips, pizza, amount, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fast food
  • Britain
  • decade
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • stable
  • significant
  • milestones
  • sharp
  • popularity
  • patterns
  • preferences
  • correlations
  • observations
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