The charts below show the percentage of Australian men and women in three age groups who were employed in 1984, 2001 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The data provides information about the number of males and females that were employed in four different nations in 1970 and 2000, both categories being aged between 60-64.

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, the number of men had a bigger proportion in Japan, Belgium and Australia,

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the women's category increased in Japan and USA. The two countries with the lowest percentages of females were Australia and Belgium.

It is clear that

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in 1970 all the presented countries had a bigger percentage of male employees compared with the year 2000. The largest number of men aged 60-64 were working in Japan

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