“Because of the busy pace of modern life, many children spend most of their time indoors and have little exposure to the natural world.” Discuss the effects lack of experience with and understanding of nature can have on children as they grow up. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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At present days, modern lifestyle made most
children
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more time in indoor
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not interact with
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nature
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world
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and take its merits. Many people believe it is a good approach as
its
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indoors safer than outdoor
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while
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others think indoors affect very badly in child's health and the development of society. In
this
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essay, I will discuss both
advantages
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and disadvantages of
this
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subject, The main advantage is indoor
places
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offer more
sefaty
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for
childern
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, these
places
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organize the movement,
the
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and the

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space has an end so
children
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can not be lost.
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, to enter any indoor
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places
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there is a security to check if you are not carrying any dangerous items, as there are
a
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strong rules if
any body
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break
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them they will be
bunished
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.
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, in
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if you bring a gun you will be removed from the school.
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, indoor
places
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keeps
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children
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safe. When we talk about
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, staying
indoor
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most of the time causes some diseases
such
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as vitamin C loss. Every human
need
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to contract with
nature
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, it improves mental health and makes life more
enjoyably
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enjoyable

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.
Moreover
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,
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should grow
learning
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about
the
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nature
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, they need to discover all aspects of the
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to help understand the
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nature
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world
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,
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make
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more studies later when they are older. There is
study
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shows
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how indoor
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affect negatively
on
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mental health
especially
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for
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, indoor
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destroy people's healthcare and do not help education improve around the
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. In conclusion, modern life helps families
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their
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from any
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on the other hand
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, it is not healthy for
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nor
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Enhance coherence by using clear transitions between paragraphs and ensuring each paragraph logically follows from the previous one.
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The essay introduces both sides of the argument, outlining the advantages and disadvantages of children spending most of their time indoors.
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