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Any leader who is quickly and easily influenced by shifts in popular opinion will accomplish little. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take.

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 who can easily copy someone's view can'
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 defy public opinion
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 and
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 be boss. Mostly
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 agree with it. On the one hand, the
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 should be the opinion of the group, summarize everyone's thoughts and choose the better one. He must have
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 opinion, because all the
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 go after him. The
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 chooses the goal for the group, if the goal changes often, there will be chaos, and
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 was little,
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 played in a football team and our captain wasn'
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, he was a common player. Our games weren'
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 something brilliant, only after the coach changed captain, games started to be something
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 because we saw a strong choice, and always a good attitude.The goal started to be nearly and we were winning and winning.
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, the
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's choice can be affected by the internet or someone else means. Sometimes it's good when the head of the group can hear everyone.
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 can'
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 be always right . If the headmen will develop
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 skills and change the ways to achieve the goal, it never will be bad. In
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big companies, bosses can copy or paste strategies from other companies. In
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 will follow
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, but when a
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 recognize mistakes and recognize that there are other opinions and better ones.
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 find the best choice and achieve it.
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To improve your essay, focus on providing more detailed and specific examples to support your arguments. This will enhance the task response criterion.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines your position on the statement. This will help guide the reader through your argument.
coherence cohesion
Work on using a variety of cohesive devices to link sentences and paragraphs smoothly. This can improve the overall flow and coherence of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Develop your concluding paragraph to summarize the main points effectively, emphasizing your overall stance and any recommendations if applicable.
task achievement
Your essay offers a balanced view of the topic, considering both sides of the argument.
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The use of personal anecdotes, such as your experience in a football team, adds a relatable example to illustrate your points.
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You demonstrate an understanding of the role of a leader and the impact of public opinion on leadership decisions.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is organized into paragraphs with distinct points, maintaining a logical structure throughout.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • steadfast
  • principles
  • undermine
  • credibility
  • adaptive
  • unrest
  • consensus
  • democratic societies
  • thoughtful consideration
  • stance
  • policies
  • short-term gains
  • progress
  • visionary
  • bending to the whims
  • beliefs
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