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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plans give information about the layout of
a
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Porth
harbour
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Harbour
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 in 2000 and the present version.
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 the castle turns into a hotel.
On the other hand
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, the car park
area
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 remains unchanged from past to present. Looking from the
south-east
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southeast
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 part of the harbour, the disused castle is reused as a tourist accommodation with the public beach
besides
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 becoming the private
one
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 owned by the hotel.
Also
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, a new road was constructed in order to have access to the hotel. Walking along the new road to the main road, new cafes and shops are operating along the
the
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shore, which
located
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 adjacent to the original lifeboat
area
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.
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, the west part of the harbour
also
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 underwent a big change
that
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two showers and towels
area
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 can be seen both on the north side of car-parking lots.
While
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 the rectangular offshore
area
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 has switched their position, the smaller
one
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are
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 now for fishing boats and
bigger
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the bigger
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one
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 for private yachts.
Moreover
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, there
are
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 an additional dock built near the old
one
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coherence
Improve coherence by ensuring smoother transitions between paragraphs and ideas. Link related ideas more clearly to enhance the flow of information.
task response
Make comparisons between the two time periods more explicit and detailed. Highlight specific changes more thoroughly.
coherence
Clarify the description of spatial transformations to ensure that the reader can easily comprehend which features have moved or changed.
task achievement
You have mentioned the major changes, such as the transformation of the castle into a hotel and changes in the offshore area.
coherence
The overall structure of the essay is logical, with a clear introduction and description of changes.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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