The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Porth

harbour

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in 2000 and the present version.

It is clear that

the castle turns into a hotel.

On the other hand

, the car park

area

remains unchanged from past to present. Looking from the

south-east

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part of the harbour, the disused castle is reused as a tourist accommodation with the public beach

besides

becoming the private

one

owned by the hotel.

Also

, a new road was constructed in order to have access to the hotel. Walking along the new road to the main road, new cafes and shops are operating along the

the

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shore, which

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adjacent to the original lifeboat

area

Then

, the west part of the harbour

also

underwent a big change

that

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two showers and towels

area

can be seen both on the north side of car-parking lots.

While

the rectangular offshore

area

has switched their position, the smaller

one

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now for fishing boats and

bigger

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one

for private yachts.

Moreover

, there

are

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an additional dock built near the old

one

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coherence

Improve coherence by ensuring smoother transitions between paragraphs and ideas. Link related ideas more clearly to enhance the flow of information.

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Make comparisons between the two time periods more explicit and detailed. Highlight specific changes more thoroughly.

coherence

Clarify the description of spatial transformations to ensure that the reader can easily comprehend which features have moved or changed.

task achievement

You have mentioned the major changes, such as the transformation of the castle into a hotel and changes in the offshore area.

coherence

The overall structure of the essay is logical, with a clear introduction and description of changes.

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2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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4 paragraphs

175 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

harbour (or harbor)
docks
shipping lanes
warehouses
recreational areas
infrastructure
additions
removals
facilities
environmental sustainability
economic impact
local community
capacity
technological advancements
industrial shipping
recreational use
surrounding infrastructure

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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Fully explain your ideas

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The advent of the internet has made it possible for people to work from home. Do you feel this working argument has more advantages or disadvantages? Share your personal experience in your essay.

There is a growing awareness among people today that life should be enjoyed in all possible ways while the traditionalists do not agree with this view. They think that there are much more to be done in life other than just enjoying. Discuss both the views and draw your own opinions.