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The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate modifications in the figures for
energy
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 produced in a country between 1983 and 2003.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the proportions of
oil
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 and coal
energy
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 produced decreased significantly
while
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 the figures for nuclear power and natural gas
energy
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 increased and the proportion of hydropower
energy
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 produced was the same over the period shown. Remarkably,
oil
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energy
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 produced accounted for far by the highest proportion of the total. Looking at the information in more detail, we can see that the highest proportion of
energy
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 produced in a country in 1983 was
oil
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, with 43%, the second highest was coal, with about a quarter of the total ( 23%), followed by nuclear power, with 20%,
finally
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, natural gas and hydropower, with 11% and 4%, respectively. In 2003, despite decreasing to 38%,
oil
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energy
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 still situated at the top of the total, after growing to 24%, nuclear power is close second to
oil
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, followed by natural gas and coal, with 21% and 13%, respectively.
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, the figure for hydropower produced in
this
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 country still maintained, with 4%

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, oil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • energy sources
  • increases
  • decreases
  • trends
  • analysis
  • significant
  • compare
  • changes over time
  • introduction
  • phase out
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