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Obesity is an ever-growing pandemic that is affecting more and more of the world’s population. The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is increasing. What is the reason for the growth of overweight people in society? How can this issue be resolved?

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Obesity
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 contentious health issue in
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recent years.
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 of
people
 who are getting overweight
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nowadays
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 has increased substantially.
This
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obesity
 and how these can be avoided.
To begin
 with,
Overweight
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being Overweight
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 is
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 disease
that is
 concerned with
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balance
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 diet .Today,
people
 are heading towards restaurants
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 sell
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burger
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 and other fast foods,Most of the time Health and safety parameters are not
upto
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up to
 the mark which impacts the health of
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 severely.
An other
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 blatant cause for
this
 is lack of exercise or any physical activity among the
people
. Briefly speaking
obesity
 is because the fats which a
body
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 are not properly utilized by the
body
 so some sort of physical activity is needed in order to burn these additional calories taken by the
body
.
On the other hand
,
problem
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 can be addressed
by
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 many
way
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 in order to nullify the impacts.
First
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 solution
of
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this
 is that
people
 should eat
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a balance
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balance
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balanced
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 diet and
this
 will create
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equality in the calories that are taken by the
body
as well as
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are consumed by it.
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people
 should develop
there
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their
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 eating habits which will create
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balance
.
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In
in addition
 to that everyone should involve themselves in
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physical activity
that is
 good
every
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 part of the
body
 and negates the impacts of
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obesity
 .
For
instance
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people
 should go for
walk
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a walk
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 or play some game that will be beneficial for the
dijestion
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digestion
 of food .
To conclude
,
obesity
 is itself
cause
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the cause
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 of multiple diseases like heart attack and high blood pressure. The only method to reduce the chances of the disease to
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 minimal level is to eat
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Balance
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 diet and exercise
on
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daily.
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Your essay covers the main aspects of the question, identifying causes and solutions for obesity.
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