Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?
Nowadays teenagers are growing increasingly independent, striving to maintain a particular image of being rich and famous,
thus
plenty of youngsters select to study other subjects rather than science which will negatively impact the
society .Correct article usage
apply
This
essay will argue the reasons and its
Impact on our nation.
Correct pronoun usage
their
First,
students are easily inspired and influenced with
all the new arising jobs Change preposition
by
due to
the lack
of proper role models and figures to guide those youth what
careerChange preposition
in what
shall
they seek. Verb problem
apply
For
example
the millions of bloggers worldwide Add a comma
example,
in addition
to the youtubers that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
creates
Correct subject-verb agreement
create
a
shallow Correct article usage
apply
air headed
content and in return earn lots of followers and money. Correct your spelling
airheaded
Furthermore
, science subjects are hard to study and master, it takes a lot of time, thinking and energy thus
students prefer to use easier methods of studying, for
instance
Chat GPT and many other similar applications.
Add the comma(s)
instance,
This
will lead to a shallow brain-washed society, students will lack
the easiest steps to navigate their daily life responsibilities in terms of budgeting and time management.As time passes, we will lack
doctors, scientists and even engineers. Additionally
mental issues will increase. Add a comma
Additionally,
For example
, depression, FOMO, feelings of inadequacy, dissatisfaction, and isolation. For example
, recent studies in the US recorded significant cases of depression due to
the increase
use of social media platforms and Change the verb form
increased
failure
attempts to reach those Replace the word
failed
influencers
goals and popularity.
Change noun form
influencer's
influencers'
Inconclusion
insufficient percentage of Correct your spelling
In conclusion
pupil
Fix the agreement mistake
pupils
studying
science Wrong verb form
study
is
Verb problem
because of
lack
of proper role models and the obstacles they face Correct article usage
the lack
while
studying, if this
problem continues to persist, it will greatly affect the societal development of each nation.Submitted by Mido on
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task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points, particularly regarding the impact of social media changes on students' subject choices.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas into clear paragraphs for each main point to improve logical structure.
coherence cohesion
You have successfully introduced the topic and provided a conclusion that ties back to your introduction.
task achievement
The essay addresses the task by identifying reasons why students avoid science subjects and predicting societal consequences.
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