Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?

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Nowadays teenagers are growing increasingly independent, striving to maintain a particular image of being rich and famous,

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plenty of youngsters select to study other subjects rather than science which will negatively impact

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society .

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essay will argue the reasons and

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Impact on our nation.

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students are easily inspired and influenced

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all the new arising jobs

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of proper role models and figures to guide those youth

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career

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they seek.

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the millions of bloggers worldwide

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to the youtubers

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content and in return earn lots of followers and money.

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, science subjects are hard to study and master, it takes a lot of time, thinking and energy

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students prefer to use easier methods of studying,

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Chat GPT and many other similar applications.

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will lead to a shallow brain-washed society, students will

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the easiest steps to navigate their daily life responsibilities in terms of budgeting and time management.As time passes, we will

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doctors, scientists and even engineers.

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mental issues will increase.

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, depression, FOMO, feelings of inadequacy, dissatisfaction, and isolation.

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, recent studies in the US recorded significant cases of depression

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use of social media platforms and

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attempts to reach those

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goals and popularity.

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science

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the lack

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of proper role models and the obstacles they face

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studying, if

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problem continues to persist, it will greatly affect the societal development of each nation.

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You have successfully introduced the topic and provided a conclusion that ties back to your introduction.

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The essay addresses the task by identifying reasons why students avoid science subjects and predicting societal consequences.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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4 paragraphs

262 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

deter
promotion
opportunities
role models
lucrative
employment
gender stereotypes
societal norms
access to information
technological stagnation
shortage
skilled professionals
innovation
healthcare sector
workforce
global competitiveness
advancements
economic growth
public health services
environmental sciences
combat climate change

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