Write a letter to your manager asking for permission to give a presentation. In your letter: describe what type of presentation you have in mind what topics it would cover and how long it would take who should participate in the presentation and where should it be conducted

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
letter to get your permission for
presentation
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the presentation
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.
Last
time, I remember when you had
meeting
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a meeting
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with all of
employees
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the employees
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you mentioned
to put
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putting
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some
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a
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discount
on
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the festivals
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festivals
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festival
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season on our
company
's electronic
equipments
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equipment
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. Next month, Diwali is coming and
that is
the
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a
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very famous festival in our country.
On
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this
festival
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every individual
buy
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buys
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new
electronic
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electronics
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or their house styling things.
This
is
the
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a
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good time
for giving
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to give
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them
discount
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a discount
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and
promoting
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our
company
. So, I decided to make the
presentation
on how to distribute the
discount
on all items. In that
presentation
, I will describe the
discount
amount of items with
superdeals
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super deals
supermodels
to attract people.
This
will increase the sale and it will be beneficial for our
company
. It will take only one to two hours for
this
presentation
. I believe we can do it in the office as we have
lot
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of space. I will
also
discuss
to put
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the
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apply
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deals like buy one get one free. Because as
customers
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customer
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I wait for
whole
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a whole
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year to buy the new products only because of deals or discounts.
Moreover
, with these
deals
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our
company
can recover from the loss which they had five months ago. I hope you will allow me to present
in
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and I can do
this
presentation
on coming Friday after we close. Hope to hear back soon. Yours sincerely, Sin
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logical structure
To improve the logical structure, ensure each paragraph has a clear focus and builds upon the previous one. Consider breaking long paragraphs into smaller ones with clear ideas.
complete response
Make sure to address all bullet points in detail and ensure clarity of the presentation's purpose.
suitable writing tone
Use a formal salutation like 'Dear [Manager's Name]' for better personalization and formality.
greeting and closing
The letter has a good greeting and closing, keeping a professional tone.
suitable writing tone
The writing tone is suitable for a formal request to a manager.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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