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The graph below shows the spending on research into renewable sources of energy in four countries between 1975 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons.

The graph below shows the spending on research into renewable sources of energy in four countries between 1975 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons.
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The given line graph provides information about the spending on research
about
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 renewable sources of energy across four countries from 1975 to 2000. It is evident that Switzerland
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 the most among 3 other countries in
this
 period. It can be seen that the United Kingdom and
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Switzerland experienced almost the same trend, in which both had fluctuated at $1 per person. They both experienced a sharp increase
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 1975 to 1980, but after some
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fluctuations
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 they fell dramatically by 2000.
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,
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the
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Denmark and Switzerland had an upward trend. The money spent by Britains increased steadily during
this
 period to $5 per person,
while
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Denmark experienced a sharp
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 and remained stable from 1980 to 1990, though, started to increase significantly to over $3 per person by 2000.
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