You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graphs show the changes in the UK industry steel between 1970 and 2000. (million tonnes vs thousand). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Value changes in UK steel industry 1970-2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

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The provided graph depicts the changes in value and

employment

status in the

steel industry from 1970 to 2000.

Overall

, it can clearly be seen that

production and imports witnessed a downward trend,

while

their total demand increased.

Followed

Wrong verb form

Following

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by,

UK's

Correct article usage

the UK's

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employment

had a significant downfall. Looking at the information in more detail, both the production and import of the

diminished drastically over the given period of time, they stood at 1 and approximately 17 million tonnes respectively, regarding the

employment

in the

also

started to decrease in the same period.

Whereas

, the British's demand remained to increase till it reached about 15 million tonnes from 1970 to 2000, as the need got higher and higher each year the fewer employees are

qualified

Change the adjective

qualifiedly

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causing the

employment

status in

Correct article usage

the UK

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dropping

Change the verb form

drop

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down to under 20 thousand.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, uk with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

140 words

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