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The diagram shows the process of making coffee. Write a report of at least 150 words showing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the process of making coffee. Write a report of at least 150 words showing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the process for making
cofee
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coffee
. There
are
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is
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total
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 of 11 in the process,
begin
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beginning
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 with picking the coffee beans and culminating in packing
into
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them into
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 containers.
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 with, the coffee seeds are picked
then
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 they are dried
on
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in
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 huge area and
sunshine
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in sunshine
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.
Next,
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the beans are roasted
in
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on
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big
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a big
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 stove and cooled immediately. After that, the cooled beans are crushed with
grinder
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a grinder
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. They are
then
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 mixed with hot water, and the combination
are
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is
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 strained and made cold enough to become solid. Following that, there are two different types of coffee seeds. The first ones are
grinded
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ground
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 with frozen liquid,
then
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 they are dried in a vacuum
for draining
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to drain
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 the water. After that, the seeds are packed into containers. The second ones are added into the jars after
feezing
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freezing
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. Those are sent to
costomers
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customers
.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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