The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.

The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.
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The map introduces the situation of land use in Canterbury town and possible positions for a new school. In general, from the central part spreading outward, it is sequentially the town centre, the housing, and the countryside in terms of the distribution of the
area
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.
First,
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the central
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is the city, which gathers the major
population
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.
Next,
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the residential district surrounds the downtown.
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, the outermost part is a rural
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in which the
population
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is sparse.
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, there is a university in the north of Canterbury and it is situated on the boundary between the housing and the rural range. Other than that, there are two main roads which connect to other cities. One road which leads to Sturry (
population
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7000) is 5km long and
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the start point is in the northeast of the downtown. Another external road extends to Chartham (
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4500), 7km long, and the motorway begins at the southwest of the town centre.
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, it is expected to build a new school. One scheduled position is in the orange part, a bustling place. Another planned spot is in the green
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and the school will be established along the road to Sturry.
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