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The given pie charts compare statistics for the yearly expenses of 5 different categories by a specific school in the United Kingdom between 1981 and 2001

The given pie charts compare statistics for the yearly expenses of 5 different categories by a specific school in the United Kingdom between 1981 and 2001
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The above two pie charts demonstrate the yearly expenditure in five different
aspect
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 by a specific school in the United Kingdom between the
year
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years
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 1981 compared to 2001,
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, the most
siginficant
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significant
 feature is teachers`s salaries contributed the highest amount in both years.
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 the weakest spending was related to insurance
in1981
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in 1981
 and 2001. Noticeably, the
propotions
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proportions
 of
the
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apply
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furniture and equipment manifest
steady
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 decline from 15% in 1981 to 5% in 2001.
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,
Resources
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the Resources
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 percentage shows
dramatic
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grew
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 in 2001
within
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 20%.
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,
techers`
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teachers
 salaries sharply increased from 40% in 1981 to 50% in 2001.
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, the
numbrer
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number
 of
others
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other
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workers`
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workers
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 and salaries
had
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 28% in 1981
then
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start
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 to
dropped
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 gradually in 2001
at
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to
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 22%.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 insurance exhibited approximately a similar range in both years which is 2% in 1991 and 3% in 2001.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage of total expenses
  • allocation of funds
  • expenditure
  • evolved over time
  • yearly expenses
  • educational resources
  • significant shifts
  • categories of expenses
  • proportional changes
  • span of years
  • budget distribution
  • operational costs
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