Many people see animals as tools to be used by humans to better their lives. They believe animals should help feed us and keep us healthy by being subjects to experiments that will lead to new medications and medical processes. Others believe that animals should have the same rights to a good life as humans. Discuss both views and state your own.

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A lot of individuals have their own perspective about

animals

as devices to be used by

people

to improve their

live

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. Some argue that

animals

need to feed

human

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and keep them healthy through experiments which become the subjects to research new medication and medical processes.

While some

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individuals in the opinion that

animals

supposed

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to have the same equal to a better life as

person

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essay will discuss two statements from my perspective First of all, there are many

animals

which can be considered to help

people

to fulfil their

body

’s nutrition

such

as high percentage of protein and fat.

For example

, Wagyu cows which have the biggest protein among the other cows, have about 26

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of protein in every 100 grams

meat

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can

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give

mor

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than enough nutrition for

human

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body

In addition

, sometimes

animals

have a

similarities

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anatomy

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human

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body

, so they can use it for

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experiment

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project

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to test new medicines whether

success

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or not before use in the real

people

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body

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, white mice

usually

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used as experimental material by splitting the

body

into two parts.

On the other hand

, there are some

animals

which cannot eaten by individuals

such

cat

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and

dog

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due to

the fact that they have been considered

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pets from ancient times. As an illustration,

dog

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can be served as house

guard

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and

tracker

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of prohibited items by smelling their scent.

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some

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several religions

are believed

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that

animals

are reincarnations of gods.

In particular

, Hindu

people

who considered cows as the vehicle of a god,

they

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worshiped

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the animal and bathed it. In my view,

while

there are some

animals

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destined to

consumed

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by a lot of societies, it is essential to make

balance

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by ensuring that ethical standards are upheld and we should minimize harm whenever possible.

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task achievement

Ensure clarity and precision by revising certain phrases and sentences. For example, revise sentences like 'improve their live' to 'improve their lives.'

coherence cohesion

Improve the conclusion by clearly stating your position, this would enhance the overall response. Ensure the conclusion sums up the discussed points effectively.

task achievement

The essay provides a balanced view of both perspectives, showing comprehension of the task at hand.

coherence cohesion

Good examples are provided to support the points, such as using Wagyu cows for nutritional value and the historical significance of certain animals.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

307 words

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