The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The aim of
this
report is to discuss the
percentage
of the population in four Asian
countries
living in
cities
from 1970 to 2020, with
the
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predictions for 2030 and 2040. The
countries
are
Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
Malaysia
, Thailand and
Indonesia
. Statistics are based on a
graph
.
Overall
, in all four
countries
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the trend of living in the
cities
as the
years
pass is rising. In
Indonesia
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the
percentage
rose from 15% to around 50% during the
years
of
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1970 and 2020, with the prediction that it’s going to rise around 10% more in the following 20
years
. A similar trend is in
Malaysia
as the
percentage
hasn't stopped growing and in the
last
50
years
went up approximately 50% and has a prediction of increasing even more. In Thailand and
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Philippines
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the
graph
fluctuates a bit more and had a slight decrease
since
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1990 until 2010 when it went up again, but these
countries
have the least amount of changes as only 20% of the
people
moved to the city in 50
years
, but there is
a
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speculation which states that around 20% more
people
will move to the
cities
in the near future. Given the data, it can be seen that
Malaysia
tops every country off and around 80% of
people
were living in the
cities
in the year 2020, even if it
hadn’t
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the highest number of residents in
cities
in the year
of
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1970. The lowest
percentage
of townspeople in 1970 was 15% but it skyrocketed and is predicted to reach 60% by 2040 in
Indonesia
. The most fluctuating
graph
is the
Philippines
graph
as it started from having 30% of city residents reached 50% and within 20
years
decreased by 10%, but is predicted to reach the 50% mark again. Generally, the increment of city residents in four Asian
countries
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no correlation between them, but similarities can be seen. In
Indonesia
and
Malaysia
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Malaysia,
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there has been a steady increase,
while
in Thailand and
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the Philippines
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Philippines
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Philippines,
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there has been a drop and the
percentage
of
people
living in
cities
didn’t rise as much as in the other two
counties
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, countries, cities, philippines, malaysia, indonesia, graph, years, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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