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The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data? summarize the information, and make a comparison. write at least 150 words.

The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data? summarize the information, and make a comparison. write at least 150 words.
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The pie charts illustrate the nutrition uptake from two types of
meal
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,
Medium
 baked
potato
 and Macaroni.
Overall
, It is
noticable
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noticeable
 that
Both
 meals contain
similler
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similar
 nutrients, Carbohydrate, Protein, Glocose, Saturated fat and Other Nutrients. The top two ingredients in
both
 dishes are
Carbohydrate
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Carbohydrates
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 and Protein compared to Saturated fat accounted for the least nutrient at only 10
percent
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 in
Medium
 baked
potato
 and other Nutrients represent the least amount at 5
percent
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 in Macaroni Looking at the graph more closely, It can be seen that
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the
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Carbohydrate accounted for the
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majority
mojority
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majority
 in
both
 meals, recording
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at
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35
percent
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 in
Medium baked
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medium-baked
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potato
 and
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at
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52
percent
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 in Macaroni,
This
 is followed by Protein.
According to
this
, The combined percentage of
top
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 two ingredients stood at around 60
percent
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 in
both
 meals.
Besides
,
while
Medium
 baked
potato
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potatoes
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 involve only 10
percent
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 of saturated fat, Macaron include
almost
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 double
amount
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the amount
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 of saturated fat at 21
percent
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Vocabulary: Replace the words medium, potato, both, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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