The chart below shows what Antropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Antropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the occupation of Anthropology
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after graduating from a certain university,
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, the table compares their salaries after five years of working.
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, we can deduce that
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course gives a good opportunity to work
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since more than half of the
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found a full-time job afterwards.
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, part-time work was the second most common past with 15 point percentage.
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, some
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preferred to study after graduation, in fact, 8% of them continued full-time postgrad studies and one student out of twenty is both
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studying and working part-time at the same time. Unlucky, we don't have data on the remaining 8% of
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.
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, regarding salaries, after five years of working as freelance consultants, 40% of them earned more than 100 thousand a month and the same number between 75 and 99 thousand.
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working in the government sector was quite profitable, roughly half of them received more than 100.000. In the end, the more variable salary was the one who worked for private companies, but the majority, specifically 35%, was from 50 and 75 thousand.
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