The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian
men
and
women
across various
age
groups who engaged in regular physical activity in 2010.
Overall
, the data reveal a noticeable trend:
women
tended to participate in physical exercise more consistently than
men
from the ages of 25 to 64.
However
, younger
men
aged 15 to 24 were more active compared to their female counterparts. By the
age
of 65 and above, the
participation
rates between genders became almost identical. In the youngest
age
group (15 to 24 years old), 52.8% of males exercised regularly, surpassing the 47.7% recorded for females.
However
, the trend reverses from the 25-34
age
bracket onward, with female
participation
increasing to 48.9%,
while
male
participation
drops to 42.2%. The proportion of
women
engaging in physical activity continues to rise steadily with
age
. Between the ages of 35 and 64, female
participation
remains above 52%, peaking at 53.3% in the 45-54
age
group.
In contrast
,
men
’s
participation
follows a declining trend, with figures dropping to 39.5% in the 35-44 group and remaining below 47% up to the
age
of 64.
Finally
, in the 65 and over category, both genders showed nearly equal
participation
, with 47.1% of
women
and 46.7% of
men
exercising regularly.
This
convergence suggests that gender differences in physical activity narrow in older
age
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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