The line graph gives information about the usage of Facebook and Twitter in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The above line graph demonstrates the average proportions of people

used

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who used

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Facebook

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and

Twitter

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platsform

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platform

platforms

in Australia from 2012 to 2016. The most significant feature is

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Twitter

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Twitter's

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score was the highest number in 2016 .

While

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Facebooks

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Facebook's

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percentage had the strongest rate in 2014. It is noticeable that the percentage of

Facebook

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and

Twitter

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useages had

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apply

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approximetaly

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approximately

a similar score in 2012 between 20 to 25. It is evident, the number of

Twitter

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sharply

decline

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declined

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in 2013 to 15.

In contrast

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Facebooks

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Facebook

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show

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showed

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steady

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a steady

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increase to 30 in 2014.

Moreover

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, the percentage of

Twitter

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remained stable with approximately

similar

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a similar

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range in 2013,2014,2015 within 14,10,14.

However

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, the score of

Facebook

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show

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showed

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dramatically

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dramatic

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growth to 30 in 2014

then

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stayed at

same

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the same

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level in 2015.

Conversly

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Conversely

Twitter

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started to

raised

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rise

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reached

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reach

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the peak point in 2016 at 35.

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addition

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addition,

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Facebook

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received 32 in 2016.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.

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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words facebook, twitter with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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6
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

140 words

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