Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to gave all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion. write at least 250 words.

Students who attend Higher Education are there because
at the end
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they are given a diploma and a certificate, which they can later use in
order
to apply for a job or an internship. In
university
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you have the option to study various
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that are not related to your
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of qualification.
This
topic is quite controversial among young university students, because one portion of them thinks that learning other subjects will give you more experience in life in general, but the rest of them
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it is crucial to
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all your energy and attention to focusing on one qualification. When you have
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a lot
of subjects, keep in mind that in
order
to succeed in them you need to be very diligent and hardworking since you need to remember all the information that you learned during the 3 years, as you might need it in the future and your field of work. In
order
to manage all of
this
, time management is key. That
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reason why some students don't recommend taking numerous lessons because taking
this
much responsibility can be tough for your mental and physical self. For that
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it is
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to think it through when you are making
this
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so that you won't study yourself to death. Personally, I think you should only focus on your main qualification
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so that you can give all the determination and focus to it,
while
you can still enjoy
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university student life. It is
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one priority that your mental state is stable and healthy in
order
for you to give your best in everything.
Overall
that is
no right or wrong only that you should make the best decision for yourself and for your mental health, so that you can have everything that you have ever dreamt of.
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Provide more specific examples or evidence to support your arguments. This will strengthen your points and present a more compelling case for your viewpoint.
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While presenting both viewpoints is achieved, ensure that each point is explicitly supported with evidence or examples from either personal experiences or theoretical frameworks.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay contains a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion points from the start.
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The opinion is clearly stated, which adds a personal perspective and makes the essay more engaging and personalized.

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • Perspectives
  • Specialize
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Career success
  • Interdisciplinary connections
  • Structured path
  • Clear goals
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Academic credibility
  • Recognition
  • Balance
  • Exploring
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