the graph below shows the comsumption of meat in Spain between 2001 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons whrere relevant.
The line graph demonstrates percentages of meat eaten by Spanish
during
2001 to 2010.
In 2001, beef was the most popular meat, recording 700 grams per person per week, followed by duck, Change preposition
from
chicken
, pork, veal and goat
which weely
consumption was about 500, 450, 300, 200 and 100 grams per person, respectively.
It seems that Correct your spelling
weekly
Correct article usage
the popularities
popularities
of Replace the word
popularity
chicken
and pork had been raised drastically, especially chicken
consumption became nearly doubled throughout the decade, Correct word choice
since chicken
450
Change preposition
from 450
gram
to 900 Fix the agreement mistake
grams
gram
, Fix the agreement mistake
grams
while
beef had been lose
its portion from 700 to 490 Change the verb form
losing
lost
gram
. Fix the agreement mistake
grams
On the other hand
, veal and goat
usage remained nearly same
during the Correct article usage
the same
perion
, except for Correct your spelling
period
person
fluctuation
in 2005 for Correct article usage
a fluctuation
goat
.
Fix the agreement mistake
goats
Overall
, the increasing consumption of chicken
and pork made it first
and second preferred meat in Spain and Correct article usage
the first
dropping
beef and duck to third and Wrong verb form
dropped
forth
place, Correct your spelling
fourth
while
veal and goat
maintained the same place compare
to 2001.Change the form of the verb
compared
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chicken, goat with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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