the graph below shows the comsumption of meat in Spain between 2001 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons whrere relevant.

the graph below shows the comsumption of meat in Spain between 2001 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons whrere relevant.
The line graph demonstrates percentages of meat eaten by Spanish
during
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2001 to 2010. In 2001, beef was the most popular meat, recording 700 grams per person per week, followed by duck,
chicken
, pork, veal and
goat
which
weely
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weekly
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consumption was about 500, 450, 300, 200 and 100 grams per person, respectively. It seems that
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the popularities
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popularities
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of
chicken
and pork had been raised drastically, especially
chicken
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since chicken
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consumption became nearly doubled throughout the decade,
450
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gram
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grams
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to 900
gram
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,
while
beef had been
lose
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its portion from 700 to 490
gram
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grams
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.
On the other hand
, veal and
goat
usage remained nearly
same
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during the
perion
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period
person
, except for
fluctuation
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a fluctuation
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in 2005 for
goat
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goats
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.
Overall
, the increasing consumption of
chicken
and pork made it
first
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the first
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and second preferred meat in Spain and
dropping
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beef and duck to third and
forth
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fourth
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place,
while
veal and
goat
maintained the same place
compare
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to 2001.
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