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The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart presents the
amount
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 of spare
time
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 enjoyed by males and females in various employment situations.
Overall
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 , the
amount
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 of leisure
time
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 men have is noticeably higher compared to women in all of the shared employment statuses, but men are not presented in all of the occupations above ,
such
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 as part-
time
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 employees and housewives.
However
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, full-
time
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 employees have the least
amount
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 of free
time
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 with approximately 45 for males and 35 for females . As for part-
time
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 employees, the column is at 40 for women and no data for men .
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 , both unemployed and retired individuals get a substantial
amount
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 of free
time
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 with the same numbers , namely 85 for males and roughly 76 for women . The
last
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 category is housewives, a group of individuals who get 50 of their spare
time
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. the column illustrates the data about females with no information on their counterparts .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • leisure time
  • employment status
  • full-time employment
  • part-time employment
  • unemployed
  • retired
  • housewives
  • gender comparison
  • notable differences
  • allocate time
  • trend analysis
  • work-life balance
  • time management
  • societal norms
  • economic factors
  • gender-specific trends
  • employment transition
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