Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rathan than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?
These days, individuals prefer to run their own enterprises rather initial
working
for someone else. Wrong verb form
than work
This
approach has many pros and cons and this
essay will try to delve into both the
aspects.
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To begin
with, on the brighter side, there are chances to get higher rewards. Indeed, undoubtedly, running own business is a difficult task and one
has to play the role of a multi-tasker. It is a fifficult
task to establish Correct your spelling
difficult
own
work and run it, but if Correct pronoun usage
your own
every thing
goes well Correct your spelling
everything
then
one
can expect huge profits after a few years. To illustrate, Mr Dheerubhai Ambani, was an Indian businessman, during his
initial days he worked in an oil company and later he decided to run his own petro-chemical firm Change the pronoun
the
and
after a few years of hardships and struggle, he managed to Correct word choice
apply
made
his company named Reliance a profitable venture. Change the verb
make
Hence
, one
must consider running own work, instead
of relying on a fixed salary.
On the other hand
, on the downside, failure can shatter one
's confidence. In fact, it is harsh
reality, because Add an article
a harsh
the harsh
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the chance
a chance
chance
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chances
to become
a successful businessman Change preposition
of becoming
are
always low and atChange the verb form
is
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the
stages
failures could demotivate a person. Add a comma
stages,
This
could be detrimental for
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to
the
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apply
self confidence
. Add a hyphen
self-confidence
For example
, according to
a research report, about 32 per cent of entrepreneurs, when
experience setbacks in their Correct word choice
who
career
find themselves in Depression and Anxiety. Fix the agreement mistake
careers
Therefore
, those who have low self-confidence may find self-employment difficult.
To sum up
, as a matter of fact, risk reward ration
is much higher in own work, but at the same Correct your spelling
ratio
time
failures could destroy Add a comma
time,
self confidence
and Add a hyphen
self-confidence
makes
an individual Correct subject-verb agreement
make
depress
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depressed
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