Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rathan than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

These days, individuals prefer to run their own enterprises rather
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for someone else.
This
approach has many pros and cons and
this
essay will try to delve into both
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aspects.
To begin
with, on the brighter side, there are chances to get higher rewards. Indeed, undoubtedly, running own business is a difficult task and
one
has to play the role of a multi-tasker. It is a
fifficult
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difficult
task to establish
own
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work and run it, but if
every thing
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everything
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goes well
then
one
can expect huge profits after a few years. To illustrate, Mr Dheerubhai Ambani, was an Indian businessman, during
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initial days he worked in an oil company and later he decided to run his own petro-chemical firm
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after a few years of hardships and struggle, he managed to
made
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his company named Reliance a profitable venture.
Hence
,
one
must consider running own work,
instead
of relying on a fixed salary.
On the other hand
, on the downside, failure can shatter
one
's confidence. In fact, it is
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reality, because
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the chance
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chance
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to become
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of becoming
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a successful businessman
are
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always low and at
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initial
stages
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stages,
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failures could demotivate a person.
This
could be detrimental
for
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the
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self confidence
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self-confidence
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.
For example
,
according to
a research report, about 32 per cent of entrepreneurs,
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experience setbacks in their
career
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find themselves in Depression and Anxiety.
Therefore
, those who have low self-confidence may find self-employment difficult.
To sum up
, as a matter of fact, risk reward
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ratio
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is much higher in own work, but at the same
time
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failures could destroy
self confidence
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self-confidence
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and
makes
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an individual
depress
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.
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