The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of 

energy production of France in two years.
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pie charts illustrate five different kinds of
energy
production
sources from 1995 to 2005.
Overall
, coal was the predominant fuel in both years.
Moreover
,
while
all the other forms of power witnessed an increase, the demand for petrol declined noticeably. In 1995, almost 60% of total
energy
production
was allocated to coal and gas. With a mere 1% growth in both power
production
stations, these two
energy
forms continued to dominate the
energy
production
industry a decade later.
Moreover
, petrol was the third source of
energy
production
in 1995, making up for almost one-third of the
production
.
However
, by the end of the
period
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the
production
bottomed down to roughly one-fifth.
Finally
, 6.40% of France's
energy
production
stemmed from nuclear
energy
at the beginning of the period, with a negligible increase
its
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production
reached
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a tenth,
While
other forms of
energy
sources grew from a low of one-twenty to one-tenth of total
energy
production
.
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