The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great 

Britain in 1992.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main 

features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
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the distribution of
Britanian
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British
male and female workforce in manual and non-manual sectors in 1992.
Overall
, women were mostly employed in the non-manual sector,
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a more balanced distribution was observed in the male group. Among females, clerical jobs contributed to 31%, followed by managerial and professional work allocated to a third. Male workers dominated the latter job at 36%. Other forms of non-manual occupations attracted a slight number of each gender, well under 10%. The most significant difference was witnessed in the craft sector.
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almost one-fourth of men were employed in
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area, only a marginal proportion of 3% of women occupied craft-related jobs.
However
, they both showed the least interest in general labour, with less than one-twentieth of each being employed as general
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labourers
labourares
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labourers
. With the same pattern, other manual occupations were more popular than crafts and general labour among both groups, attracting
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around 25% of each population.
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