The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the USA, Canada, the UK and Japan in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar graph illustrates the percentage of
expenses
in five different sectors of four countries (United States
, Canada, United Kingdom) in 2009.
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money
was spent in Add an article
the money
Housing
sector, Add an article
the Housing
whereas
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minority
expenditures
.
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expenditure
To begin
with, more then
a quarter of Correct your spelling
than
money
was spent Correct article usage
the money
in
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on
United
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the United
state
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States
a
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then
25% in other countries. Replace the word
than
Food
industry has Add an article
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the second
shares
in Fix the agreement mistake
share
expenses
for Japan and United
Kingdom, meanwhile United Correct article usage
the United
states
and Canada accounted for Capitalize word
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then
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expenses
. Exactly 20% of money
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the money
spent
by Canada Add a missing verb
was spent
in
Transportation, Change preposition
on
whereas
, countries invested less than 20%.
Only United States
spend more then
5% Replace the word
than
in
health care, Change preposition
on
while
, United
Kingdom has around 2.5% of Correct article usage
the United
expenses
. In clothing
sector, Correct article usage
the clothing
approx
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approximately
expenses
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are done
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the three
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the Uinted
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United
States
. Which has around 2.5% of share
in Clothing.Correct article usage
the share
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