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The chart belo gives information about the ratio of income to spending (in dollars) by American by age range in 2013. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The line graph illustrates the ratio
income
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of income
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 and outcome (In
dollar
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dollars
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) of American
people
 by different
age
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ages
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 In 2013.
According to
 the result of
report
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the report
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, it can be seen that
poeple
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people
in
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apply
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between the
age
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ages
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 of 35 to 64
seems
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seem
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 to have
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a resonable
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resonable
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reasonable
 relationship between income and outcome
while
 the
age
 of older than 75 have
similar
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a similar
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 ratio and the worst case,
people
in
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apply
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the
age
 of less than 25 spend more than their salary. Young
adult
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adults
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tend
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tend to
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 use more than earn at the rate of 30000,
compare
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compared
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 to
middle
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middle-aged
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age
people
 which significantly
save
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saves
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 their revenue mostly seen in
people
rage
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aged
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 from 25 to 74 at the
rage
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range
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of
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apply
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salary from nearly 53000 to at the highest almost
hit
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apply
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80000. At the same time,
an
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the
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 elderly
shows
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show
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 the same
of
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apply
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spending and
earing
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earning
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 at the ratio of 30000 to 40000.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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